September Heights Challenge: Moon (2 haiku)

this red moon is ours
glowing bright, feigned innocence–
white like other moons
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the man on the moon
runs his fingers through oceans
turns tides to pass time

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I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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41 Responses to September Heights Challenge: Moon (2 haiku)

  1. boomiebol says:

    You write these things so well. Very nice!

  2. doncarroll says:

    nice this is,but i’m all over the second one:)

  3. unfetteredbs says:

    I love the second one too. Love the running his fingers through the ocean.You paint unique thoughts for me … thank you

  4. Green Speck says:

    The man on the moon — is he a superhero? ;-)

  5. Maharukh says:

    indeed a fantasy what you created! lovely!

  6. Ramesh Sood says:

    And he does it so well..isn’t it….Moon has on many occasions rested in my haiku..
    I love Moon…come and see here to know why.. http://rameshsood.blogspot.in/2012/09/mom-is-with-angels.html

  7. poetrydiary says:

    I think the first one is good too – the red moon isn’t really red: white like other moons.

  8. nelle says:

    Contrasting perspectives. Perhaps a show hosted by Paige Davis, trading places with the moon person for a day.

  9. unfetteredbs says:

    loved this so much… I had to come back to visit the man on the moon

  10. Bruce Ruston says:

    really liking the gravity of the second one

  11. Wonderfull … don’t have the words to explain why … well done. The second one is my favorite.

  12. elleceef says:

    Like them both, very special, but the second one is my favourite too. I love the image.

  13. Patti says:

    Oh, nice! The second is just wonerful. Love it!

  14. I love this! Running fingers through the ocean…so magical. Nicely done!

  15. Love the way feigned innocence is explained by all the other words on the first haiku. The second one is wonderful!

  16. Nicely written, Susan. I love the second one

  17. Susan says:

    o! The first opened my eyes wide, the 2nd turned on the light. How I hope that man never stops turning “tides to pass the time.” Love it!

  18. Leo says:

    Man on the moon.. how beautiful is that :) Liked it. Maybe the winds he sends does turn the tide.. Lovely.

  19. Ahhh – such gentle and stirring haiku. Nicely written snapshots for the challenge

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