becoming this us

bodies blend to become
this us promised in your hands
how they open to mine
how our eyes echo feeling

this us promised in your hands
painting skin all colors with one touch
how our eyes echo feeling
the way your voice calls my spirit

painting skin all colors with one touch
you scribe alphabets of desire
the way your voice calls my spirit
there is only yes in my breathing

you scribe alphabets of desire
how they open to mine
there is only yes in my breathing
bodies blend to become

***This is my offering today for Dverse.

About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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50 Responses to becoming this us

  1. Nicely done! Bodies follow minds!

  2. Green Speck says:

    Bodies blending … love welcoming :-)

  3. George Ellington says:

    Susan, this is one of the most intimate and touching verses I have read from you. Lovely.

  4. davidtrudel says:

    I love this, perfectly elegant but passionate. One of your best!

  5. paulmilnepoetry says:

    Oh my, is it me or is it getting got in here?

  6. brian miller says:

    nice…really love the form…and hte second stanza is by far my fav….there is nice spirituality and intimacy in that one for me…the painitng of the bodies…great touch….

  7. Reblogged this on Souls ascending and commented:
    Wow, I’m constantly amazed by the extremely high quality of poetry on WordPress, and this one is no exception – blows me away!

  8. Claudia says:

    there is only yes in my breathing…love this…love the intimacy and closeness here…of body and soul..

  9. The form enhances the pleasure :). Wonderfully done!

  10. Mary says:

    Very nice. The repetition enhances the meaning…brings it home. Beautifully sensual poem. (Fan needed!)

  11. Surrendering to love and to this gorgeous piece

  12. Painting skin all colours, beautiful.

  13. hedgewitch says:

    This is a lovely, very effective pantoum, using repetition very adroitly, and some lovely lines as the framework. Enjoyed it very much.

  14. Mmmmm, ‘you scribe alphabets of desire’, mmmmm

  15. Laurie Kolp says:

    Love this, Susan… especially the final stanza.

  16. there is only yes in my breathing – what a gorgeous line! Beautiful, Susan. K

  17. tashtoo says:

    You’ll learn I tend to blush easily! This is lovely, classy and intimate…fantastic form, wonderful to read out loud..this reader is happy! Awesome :)

  18. What a lovely pantoum ~ sensual and romantic ~

  19. ManicDdaily says:

    Wonderful pantoum – so subtly done – and beautifully framed. The repetition feels like a wonderful embrace – various limbs around the reader. k.

  20. Gracefully woven… you make a pantoum look easy.

  21. janehewey says:

    oh my this is lovely. scribe alphabets of desire. so wonderful, Susan.

  22. Myrna says:

    I’m not one for form, but I know you did a great job with this one. Because so many people write love poems, I think it’s hard to be original. Yet, you are.

  23. kkkkaty says:

    Gosh, I had forgotten almost….what it means to be in love and this brought it back to me..I need to learn this form..

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