the pause before fall

the air has that ripening
apple smell
& nights are cooler.
still, summer
threads sun to my skin
in the afternoon to blend
coconut lotion heated
to a gentle simmer
with my vanilla
& honey soap
to draw out bees
scenting that sweet.

I blow them gently off
candied skin–
who can blame them
when I smell of cakes
& frosting, even
as my mind moves to rooms
full of chalk and book dust
not beaches
and summer melons.

I might even
use baking
as a metaphor
but that is another fall thing
I do

& those apples
are not sweet enough
yet

in August
to begin

***At Dverse today, we are writing about summer–so I wrote about the end of it.  http://dversepoets.com/

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About Susan L Daniels

I am a firm believer that politics are personal, that faith is expressed through action, and that life is something that must be loved and lived authentically--or why bother with any of it?
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68 Responses to the pause before fall

  1. Claudia says:

    oh nice…can so feel this with all the scents and texture…loved especially…
    to draw out bees
    scenting that sweet.
    I blow them gently off
    candied skin–
    who can blame them
    when I smell of cakes
    & frosting….hmmm…nice… and heck yes…the apples are not sweet enough yet..but soon will be…

  2. kelly says:

    oh, this made me smile with all those scents wafting through the air as I read it… and now I am so ready for crisp fall apples…

  3. Mary says:

    I love the description “ripening apple smell.” That so much describes August; and yes, summer nights right now are cooler. Fall is in the air, but blissfully it is still summer. I enjoyed your write.

  4. Rhonda says:

    Apples and not peaches. Your right…we are leaving summer and entering fall…apples are perfect for this. And I smell them, love them. Beautiful sfam.

  5. This is quite a delight to the senses. All the sweet fragrances and thought of juicy fruit and then you go on to mention cakes and frosting… suddenly, I’m hungry! lol
    Loved all the visuals in this Susan.

  6. ManicDdaily says:

    Very lovely – the bees a bit worrisome – but the scents are terrific. k.

  7. Oh Susan – I really liked this – loved the aromas and the bees. Feels like the late summer with the move toward fall. Just wonderful! K

  8. brian miller says:

    smiles…love all your smells…and laughed at he bees and brushing them off…we get that as well…so you are a teacher as well? our starts monday…

  9. boomiebol says:

    I love it…it has summer written all over it…

  10. I love the title ~ a beautiful poem

  11. danadampier says:

    Vanilla and Honey soap… hmmm that smells good! I love it.

  12. poemsofhateandhope says:

    This captures so well that tipping point between summer and fall….and being not quite ready to let it go….loved how you talk about using baking as a metaphor- but then that’s something you do in Autumn….this makes me want to soak up those last few drops of sunshine- knowing that it won’t be long before the leaves are falling- so very good

  13. Laurie Kolp says:

    Fragrant, delightful.

  14. Ahh the smell of coconut, don’t smell that as much these days with the 30+ sunscreen, still with honey soap… yes smells lovely!

  15. This is a wonderful celebration of the scents of summer…and there’s nothing quite like it!

  16. This is great. :) Love all the scents. This is my favorite part:

    “coconut lotion heated
    to a gentle simmer
    with my vanilla
    & honey soap
    to draw out bees”

  17. Archna says:

    Delicious piece, Susan. I love the ripe smell in the air and the candied skin. So many sweet and pretty images here. I like how you lead us into the next season, also. :)

  18. pmwanken says:

    First off — love the title!!

    Second — I love the “sweet” monologue of this piece…like I can overhear your thoughts as you bask in the late summer rays.

  19. sonny says:

    nice with a touch of sensual…esp the bees….hmmm…all i get are flies buzzing around…grins…maybe thats a sign i dont smell of cake frostings…hehe

    lovely musings….:))

  20. Susan says:

    I love how you manage to celebrate the smells of both summer and fall. Your bees and their attraction to you brought back memories. I want to quote all of your lines back to you to feel the way I do, but I won’t. I am blessed to get to read such luscious poems.

  21. Mohana says:

    such richly woven words! i can smell your candied skin…pretty pretty poem!

  22. hobgoblin2011 says:

    really nicely done. Excellent read. Really like the descriptive choices here, paint a very visual image. Thanks

  23. Descriptive words and roll on apple pie autumn!

  24. clawfish says:

    the nature of scents and tastes propel me through this vivid picture

  25. ds says:

    I like this–especially the way you took a non-summer fruit, and made it the essence of end-of-summer wistfulness. Thank you.

  26. nelle says:

    Apple season! There was an orchard we frequented in Vermont, and in fact, I wrote it into Twinned. So love fetching apples, and yes, I’ve been in a tree. ;-)

  27. dani says:

    LOVE your imagery! wonderful!!!

  28. kkkkaty says:

    I feel I am walking in your sandals….

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